THE FROZEN PEOPLE
I got out of bed slumping onto the mouldy, damp wood with an ear-piercing shriek. Suddenly there was a head-splitting scream clearer than broad daylight, I listened intently, it didn't sound like anyone I knew. Sprinting down the stairs, I hurled myself into the the kitchen then just stood there ,mouth hanging open. There was a broken window with sharp smithereens of glass scattered over the floor. People were standing inside the house close to crumpling to the floor also there was a doll . . . dressed exactly like me!. The only other thing was a rusty ramshackle wooden box: trembling, I heaved the lid up gingerly - inside was a dilapidated metal box. At that moment the spooky room filled with smoke wafting around the cracked shards of glass then a eternal spirit came down from the steamy lights she lifted the lid gingerly then dissolved into nothing, I crept up to it, but a knife came whistling past my ear and ice cold steel kissed pearly human flesh and the stranger fell to the floor gasping for breath. Magically, like a switch, the mysterious doll came to life then dragged me screaming into the howling night air.
Hi Sienna,
ReplyDeleteThank you for entering the 100 Word Challenge this week. You have used some great vocabulary in your writing which helps to create a clear picture in the reader's mind. You have used a range of punctuation and sentences to great effect.
Brilliant writing!
Mrs Stones - Bradford, U.K.
http://bradfordschools.net/blog/miriamlord100wc/
WOW, Sienna - this is such a powerful 100wc - I agree 100% with Mrs Stones: this is brilliant writing!
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Hi Sienna,
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for entering the 100 word challenge this week. Your writing is very dramatic - almost poetic - with a great range of vocabulary and lots of vivid description of sights and sounds. I don't think you've used the prompt exactly as written, but well done. Keep writing and using your amazing imagination!